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Is it persuasive? What should I change? Please keep in mind I’m only 13 and in the 7th grade.

WildCare protects and ensures the lives of thousands of animals every year, making it in my opinion one of the most important organizations in the Bay Area. The work WildCare does is beneficial to our environment and to the welfare of our bay’s ecology, keeping it stable and healthy; a nearly impossible task. The way that many people treat the environment torments the homes of our local animals putting their lives in jeopardy. Whether their populations are diminishing or they are abundant, WildCare still helps the animals in need of assistance. WildCare is a comforting idea for animal lovers like me, knowing that there are people who care for the lives of animals as much as those of humans. Even with 4,000 animals to take care of, WildCare still manages to protect them and bring them back to health. Animals are spirited creatures that help this world go around, man without animals would never be able to survive; they would be missing out on sincere creatures that have truly pure intentions. I believe that animals are what keep the human race in line, without the idea of threating lives of animals; people would attack each other like savages putting an end to us. They are in my mind peacemakers, gentle yet they know when to logically stand their ground and to actually attack for reason. WildCare helps keep the animals healthy and protects their worlds and in a way, ours.
The idea of tending to hurt animals is something that really takes heart, I believe that only extremely dedicated people are capable of keeping with this type of work and when I set my heart on something I won’t stop until I feel that I’ve succeeded. My goal in life is to become a biologist and study leopards, specifically the Amur Leopard. Hopefully by the time I succeed in becoming a biologist, the Amur Leopard will still be alive. I’m also very interested in other sorts of animals, such as lynxes, foxes, meerkats, lemurs, etc. I was introduced to animals when I was in preschool, our teacher would teach us about different habitats and the animals that lived there, ever since then I have had a thirst for knowledge about other animals. I’ve tried considering taking another path in life, but every time I see animal shows I think, “How fun would it be to get to spend your days studying and working with them?” In order for me to start in this path, I must start somewhere, and where better than WildCare? I’ve also tried to protect animals in many different ways, I have written multiple essays to companies that preform animal testing, asking them to attempt using alternate more effective forms of testing and have written an essay that was published in my school newsletter about puppy mills. But, I believe it’s time to take a step forward and actually volunteer and hands on help the animals. I love my two pets, my dog, a beagle, miniature pinscher mix and my cat, an American Short Hair. I believe that I would be perfect as a volunteer at the WildCare Center; it could set me up for my future and help me get into a great high school. It might be a bit discouraging that this would be my first volunteer work and I hope that doesn’t make you change your mind about possibly considering me.

Thanks for reading it

Change your last sentence. Volunteering is not discouraging at all. It is a wonderful way to help. You may want to delete the parts where you discuss your views on the importance of animals keeping the humans in line. That is a little ‘out there.’ You are volunteering to help an animal care facility; not going off and joining GreenPeace.
Other than that, it is a nice piece of writing. Perhaps you can ask some teachers if you may use them as a reference. A respected professional’s good opinion of you will always opens doors to new opportunities.
Good Luck!

I have a four year degree in History and an associates in criminal justice. I’ve been going through the hiring process for many different agencies including local, state, and federal. I currently have a job as a traditional security officer, but was offered a job at the local rescue mission running the mail room. The mail room organizes everything to do with the donation letters to be send out and leads volunteers in helping get the work done. I’m not sure which one would look better on a resume for law enforcement.

Both would look good. I would continue your current job because as another poster indicated, employment stability and work history can be very important. Security work is more related to police work. Volunteer work also looks very good on resumes. Consider doing something once a week such as being a big for Big Brothers Big Sisters.